More of the Ugly
I submitted my blog to a group of uh people for a review and they do what they say: Ask and you shall receive. I asked and I got.
Here are some of the reviewer comments:
It is pretty much sunshine and lollipops over there. Problem is, I’m not entirely sure what “over there” is. Is this a blog or a self-help site? What is the purpose? You’re all over the place.
The writing is… chipper.
It’s very Good Housekeeping-ish, chatty.
There are some chuckles. Chippy, cheerful chuckles. No one’s cackling with glee here.
It seems like she approaches this like a job, like a way to break into something. It’s all marketing and spit-shine and I want to hate it because it’s gutless.
We don’t get to see who Valerie really is. There are no relationships explored, no real memories shared, no meat, no dimension, no sexiness.
But for the love of Shamwow, find some focus, figure out why you’re blogging, what you want to gain, and who your audience is. If it’s a general blog about your life, be that and leave out all the money-saving crap.
Okay, now this is not all that bad, most of it is accurate, to a point. I was hoping they would tell me something I didn’t already know. I do lack focus and I am all over the place, that’s who Valerie is. I don’t get too personal on purpose.
The only thing I really want to change about my blog is the tagline: my rants and ramblings, I know that sucks. Here’s what I came up with: If you want focus, go stare at a dot, cause you won’t find it here.
Suggestions on improvements around here? Just as long as you don’t bash my writing cause I might actually tear up. I always said I wanted to write a column in a newspaper, too bad they didn’t read my post, Why I Blog.